Friday, January 19, 2007
Discriptive Paragraph-nobody understands
I turn the shiny silver knob and the door slowly creaks open. I gleefully walk in to the brightly lit classroom, but as soon as I turn around I freeze. Those frightening cold beady eyes staring back at me like a evil doll sitting on a shelf starting at you while you sleep. I say "hello" hoping that he would stop staring, but instead he growls and I quickly back away as if he were some rabies infected animal. I go through the rest of the day avoiding this horrible creature and soon forgeting about the incident earlier that day. Then Math/Physics class comes. I plop down in my seat with my dear friend Jessi Mos, we were so carefree. All of a sudden I smell a putrid sent stinging my nostrils then the laugh like nails on a chalk board goes into my ears and pop my ear drums. I hear Jessi shriek and I know that I'm next. Goodbye cruel world!
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Veni Mi Fili, Veni Mi Fili
Hic Veni Da Mihi Mortem Iterum.
what can I say? this is pure genious. I feel the viciousness of his hateful demeanour.
Sure connell, taunt the old man.
I think that this is a great piece of work. You convey a varity of different moods, starting out cheerful and then resorting to fearful. Reading this sends shivers done my spine. My favorite part is when you describe this thing as a rabies infected animal. This phrase is powerful. It adds meaning to the piece. Keep on writing these wonderful pieces
I would have to say this is the best descrpitive paragraph I have read so far :]. I like your use of the word "gleefully." Its a very Bianca kind of word. I also really liked the simile of comparing justin to "an evil doll sitting on a shelf, staring at you while you sleep."
nice work =D
wow i have commented on this so many times. well anyways, now i have to say what words i like. so here they are:
rabies infected animal wow this is great. i like how this apeals to not only my sense of sight, but my sense of smell and hearing as well. I can smell the putrid smell of a sick dog as well as hear the foaming and growling.
putridthis is just a great word. need i say more?
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