JESSi said...
well like i said before, this brought tears to my eyes. I liked how you used diolouge, or however you spell it. One thing that you can improve on is useing more descriptive words. I think that will get your enraged mood across even more.
I felt that this comment was helpful because Jessi told me to add more descriptive words and why ("enraged mood across even more"). So next time I write a descriptive assignment I will know to use more descriptive words to get my mood across better.
Dulce Garcia said...
I really liked what you wrote. You put a lot of thought and description to what you wrote.
This comment on the other hand wasn't too helpful. It was very nice, but it didn't give me any suggestions on what I could do to improve on.
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